Up for breakfast

I added two more notes to the plan, triggered by the proofreader slamming his head against the wall. The notes are only incidentally connected to the latest feedback, though. I can see a connection with one: if people can't get far enough in to note the second primary character, then it's more obvious than ever he needs to be introduced somewhere in the first chapter instead of the fifteenth.

The more readily identifiable protagonist needs to be introduced differently but at least is a worthy construct. This is good, because if your primary female character is ineffective... bad things will happen.

Bye, guys.